October 10, 2002

• No appliances are mentioned below, really!

  
  

  So I was critiqued in my English class.  The instructor was the first one and he said wonderful great things about my writing and said the only thing he could see improvement in is that I need more adjectives, ok sure....THEN...oh THEN....I get this,
  "My interest was peaked threw out most of the story and I could definitely see the realism between the two sisters and the brother Randy"
  Seriously, this is how it was presented to me....HONEST!!  I told you that would happen, did I not?!  GAWD!!!!!!!  Then I got a few others basically just trying to find things wrong with it...(no I'm *not* tooting my own horn, these people really had to pull this from far far far up their asses.) One said that the pace of the story was off.  Saying it went too fast at some parts then really slow at others...hmmmm ok.  Last time I read a novel or any story, you had fast parts then slow parts, like a roller coaster but hey, who am I to judge, right?

  
  

  Then there is the next story that the class has to critique, and trying NOT to sound so full of myself that I'll explode everywhere, but........I really feel sorry for this guy's coming after mine.  It's bad, I mean REALLY bad.  The grammar is TERRIBLE, spelling, OMG don't even get me started.  He writes probable for probably.  And it is just an all around BAD BAD BAD story.  Now I get to figure out a way to critique it without hurting his feelings....

  
  

  
  

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  Lesson for the day...

  
  

  To- 'We are going to her house.'

  
  

  Two- 'I am taking two people to her house.'

  
  

  Too- 'I am going too.' (aka, also)

  
  

  Thank You.

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